Thank you.

Hebe, thanks. I'm glad you liked it.

Persephonie, I apologize for saying "was". Hope that makes you happy. I was just using the past tense form, so...

This is utterly fantastic! You are a magnificent talent. Loved it.

MUCH better.

I noticed a few grammar errors, but not too many. Actually, I think it was only two.

But, I dont really think I got the point of this "story" or "poem" or whatever you choose to call it. It started out strong, a lot of the words had meaning, then it kinda fell apart.

I'm sure it was meant to be funny, but in the beginning, with all that discussion about honesty, I'd think it was meant to be serious words of wisdom.

Also, it seemed to be scrambled together in a mess. Each stanza seemed to change the subject drastically. From honesty, to being a nice guy... to tiny penises. It didnt really flow (for me).

I'll admit I'm not good at being brutally honest, so I hope that was straight forward enough for you.

Wow. Was that all just one long sentense?
I didnt really understand why it was called "You're Always Sorry" when it mostly talked about the car. I suppose you're going to continue?

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Such as short shower. I bet you're not even clean.

Nice one! I laughed for an hour straight.

This is a good story, but there were just a few problems. Mostly grammar stuff, but that's not too big of a deal to me. But, the story itself was a bit rushed. There was some oil and some sex, but that was it.

Also, I think you accidently changed from past to present tense for a moment.

And, this isnt really a big problem, but you used the word "p.u.s.s.y" quite a lot.

Other than that, it was good. Very hot.