Discussion of "ColdHearted" by Colorless
hebe6405 5 years, 7 months ago
Disclaimer: I'm guessing the age of the writer to be in the early to mid-teens. Please use my comments and suggestions as a direction toward improvement. I do not want to discourage you from continuing to write. There are good elements in this story, the foreshadowing in particular.
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