All Comments by Cloud2036

Thanks for your help. I'd like to point out a few things I could not mention. Firstly I have two copys of this story. One is the preview that I show people or put online; I do not edit this one anymore. And the other is the final that I keep for myself. there are some changes in the final that are not in the preview. for one thing the final is much longer and also I've redone/retold some parts of the story. As for how Olga knew Ivan was single I thought I suggested it enough, but i guess not, when she recalls her aunt telling her to "check their hands" meaning to check for wedding rings. Something you pointed out that I haven't fixed even in my final is a major detail. Olga does not sleep with Ivan while she's with him. I thought that because I didn't mention it ever occuring that it wouldn't come up but now that I think about it, it does need to be stated that they did not sleep together. Thank you for that. and about the paragraphs; I have this story in a word document, so i just copy and paste the chapters into the boxes. when I do that though the box eliminates my line breaks. I thought that that was just how it was supposed to be. it does have breaks in the final and the preview but not here. sorry for that. Final note: I didn't want to make too much of this chapter, it should have been one of those "short" things in life that you learn a lot from.

thanks. I couldn't bring this in as like an author's note or something, but for one thing; the story was typed quite a while ago in microsoft word, so when I pasted it into the box it got rid of all my paragraph breaks. under normal conditions it would have them though. also as far as the lack of personality, I just thought it was funny for you to say that because I based Olga (and some other up comming characters) off of parts of my own personality; I didn't want to make it too evident though, seeing as olga is a girl and I am not. Also i was trying to make her somewhat relatable but it's difficult to make a woman from 1950's Russia ralatable to average women of today. again thanks though.