Discussion of "Jeopardy" by Cleokatrah

1		cjbishop08 1 year, 6 months ago Reply Not usually a fan of the whole prom scene kind of thing, but this was great! Been reading over several of your submissions and you're a great writer. Can't wait to find out what happens next :)
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1		writerwannabe 1 year, 5 months ago Reply This I have no problem commenting on...lol. Excellent writing - descriptive narrative, Dutin's character build, scene progression, metaphors and analogies just right, not too much nor too little - and a resounding bang...WTF...at the end. Great! ;o)
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1		djinndarme 1 year, 5 months ago Reply Cleo, You did a great job describing Dustin's nervousness and painting the scene in the room. Nice cliffhanger at the end, too. The only thing that distracted me was I kept thinking "He wears an ascot? A baby blue ascot? Does he also drive the Mystery Machine?" LOL. Enjoyable read. I will make sure to check out your other postings.
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