Discussion of "poem mash anyone?" by CincysLette

your poem has an interesting theme running through it but id say that i think you focused a bit to much on trying to make it rhyme that the feel of it is lost a little but i quite like it

this is a poem of feeling. One should let themselves feel it instead of studying the flow or writing of it.

The writing of it does show you are still learning and you have started on a good path.

Take Care, DreamSweet and Let Your Heart Shine

That was good, in a sad kind of way. Although I liked it.