Discussion of "Things That Go Bump" by Cheeseliker

Hey, anyone who reads this, should I end the chapter where it is now, or make it longer? I can't decide myself. I've got an idea that could add more, but the ending also seems decent just the way it is now. Any thoughts would be appreciated.

Oh well, I couldn't wait, and just decided to publish it. I hope you enjoy it.

You did a great job ratcheting the tension up at the end of the chapter. The character is progressing nicely; revealing his impatience ties in nicely with the earlier revelation of his quasi-loner status. Good job again. A 5 for this one.

Enh, I thought this one was only okay. It felt like you rushed to get this chapter out Cheeseliker, and didn't put as much effort into it. I liked the first chapter a better. The ending seemed a bit cliche, though depending on where you go with it, it could be just the touch it needs.
I didn't vote since I hate giving mediocre votes to good writers, but let's see what you do with it.

See? I was right. You have a nice quick dash of pen and thought strokes.

There's simply enough right here to set up too many options.

I gave it 5. Now let me follow the yellow brick road here..

see ya

I liked this chapter. I thought you carried through, developed the character and left it hangin (in suspense, again). Great. OK...off to mash it! Another 5 for this one.

I thought it was the best of the chapter 2 continuations. The chapter was short but it ended with great suspense.

I thought you did a great job too. I liked that the dryer doors had to have shut silently, which is hard to do and made the scene that much creepier. I agree with ShadowMan too that the character got some depth in this chapter.