Discussion of "The Million Dollar Fat Man" by BazookoJones

Bad **** BazookoJones! A great beginning for our heavy hero. Love the outfit choice too! Beyond that, any piece of work that has a ‘TJ Hooker’ reference in it gets a meaty 5 vote from me.

Kinda reminds of the big Lebowski. It's nice, but I think you could cut a lot of the wordiness out and make it easier to read. I like the story and the character a lot, but I had a hard time staying on track.

I, too, loved the story and the corny, crazy, almost unbelievable character...lol. Like mjm, there were parts where I had some difficulty keeping up.

Not a biggie...in fact, part of the stories charm..;o).

Great imagination put together with great word smithing!

Awesome. I agree that there are some minor wording issues and grammatical errors, but nobodies perfect, just look at my story. Otherwise, I loved it, and Russel is such a perfect character for this theme, he amazes me and has truly come to life. I hope he has a spare set of pajama bottoms. Congrats on a great start.

Bazooka, what can I say...

You are quickly becomming one of my favs. I loved the character and the storyline. Great outfit choice as well. I didn't think it was wordy at all. I love you style of writing. It's descriptive, but not over done (much like my cooking). You are unbelievablly creative.

Thanks DGrimes, appreciate the comment, means a lot.
And dkk I'm sure you cook better than me, single guy here if it wasn't obvious and I can always tell when my burger is done, because the smoke alarm goes off. Ah that old joke. But it's true...:/ thanks for the comments.