Discussion of "Experimental Novel Chapter..." by BazookoJones

wow...real..real action packed! gosh this guy is crazy but it makes you want to read all the more...in other words nice.

The holiday cheer is starting to wear off. I thought I'd take a peek at SM and this is what I find: a freaky hit HBO series! Baz, you goy something here. Develop it. Give your killer a job that allows him to travel and pay bills.

thanks al, good to see ya, hope all is well this Holiday Season. Go easy on the potato gun would ya :)

Ahhh, finally back to SM (as in storymash, Baz)...;o).

Got my book done, self published. It'll be online around the first of April. So, I thought I'd see what's up around here. Other than this...not much and what is, ain't worth talking about. Where the hell did all the good writer's go?

Thank Whomever, you're still here; albeit two months ago, anyway...lol.

Great start! I agree with al, too...flesh it out, even as a first chapter. How does one do all that flying with a gun? Like your characters already, but could use a little more. I'm not friendly with them, yet; I know it's only the first chapter. Still...the "experiment" could use a little more work.

I hope you know that I would never, ever say that to 98% of the writer's here. I don't think they'd understand what I was talking about...lol.