Discussion of "How to End a Life - Take One" by AveryColeman

Great piece of writing. Very crafty. The whole seemingly bizarre Clorox thing adds to whole half-bakedness of Kara' character. Excellent.

Great theme. Well-written and mashable.

YES! Saved at the last second. At least for now.
Good writing. It certainly touched an emotional chord. It’s hard to read about people being that close to taking their lives. Even though you tell yourself it’s just fiction…it still puts you on the edge of your seat.
And yuck…drinking bleach.

Wow, I was thinking an unrated version of Catcher in the Rye, like if Larry Clark directed it...dark stuff...well constructed, it's obvious you put some thought and time into it, rang true, by that I mean believable, she didn't make out with a vampire at the end or something...nicely done

It's funny you should say that, I wasn't really thinking too hard about it while I wrote it. I was numb like Kara, really in a low place and I just sort of bled the words out. I'm glad you appreciate the believability, people seem to scoff at realism these days.

I wrote this in a particularly foul mood. I've never actually gone so far as to flirt with suicide, but I've thought about it a lot. It's funny, I never actually expected anyone to read this, much less comment on it. Thanx 4 the feedback and keep it coming!

Very well thought out. This really grabbed me. Writing really is the best outlet when your pissed about something. Well done.

I'm allergic to bleach, just thought I would share that. LOL Great debut chapter Avery! The title grabbed me itself, but your story depth kept me there. Creative and vivid. Keep up the good work!

Welcome to SM, Avery!

This was very well done, technically proficient writing. I really like your character's attitude and you did an excellent job of visually portraying the situation and the action through her thoughts.

Why anyone would use Clorox as their vehicle to suicide is far beyond me, but different strokes for different folks, I guess...lol.

That's why the Nazis had it all patented - just use a pill. Getting your hands on a pill like this is another matter, but I sure as hell would like to have on - just in case it's time to evacuate.

Good story.

Cheers.

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it is interesting....I liked it