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Discussion of "Invisible" by Artsy_Queen


1 moon_flower_girl123 3 years ago Reply

wow a fantasy poem...but i like this :) it has a happy ending, whew


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-1 MrLightening 3 years ago Reply

Solid voice, and you're just getting a handle of the poetic flow. The first few stanzas work better than the end. The hospital section feels rushed. This poem could probably be a bit longer. Two stars.


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1 Artsy_Queen 3 years ago Reply

Rushed? I spent time on this you know, but thanks anyway. I hope that next time you wouldn't be as harsh with your critiques. This is my first poem too.


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1 Jezzebelle_Bella 3 years ago Reply

this was really good, and I think everyone could relate to it. Sometimes I feel like I am invisible too. I live in a house full of people so it's easy to feel that way. Keep up the good work!


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-1 Artsy_Queen 3 years ago Reply

My very first poem


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