Discussion of ""Take The Wheel" chapter 1" by Arizona_Rose

This has the makings of something very good. Characters are vividly described and you let their words and actions describe their personalities. The setting in a decrepit apartment is also done very well and seems to fit the story. Then at the end you introduce a background story which made me want to read the next chapter.

hey thnx! next chapter soon, working on it now!

Sorry that I have been negligent in not reading this story sooner. It is well-written, excellent dialogue, with a wonderful flare for descriptive narration. I am usually not a fan of non-traditional fonts, but this was easy on the eyes. I love the word 'Learnt' but only because I am not brave enough to use it. What are Hunter green eyes? Is that the green from camo-hunter attire? I like the use of italics to open and close the chapter. It is a tool that I trust any masher to also use in keeping with the voice of the storyteller. Welcome to SM.

Thnx, this site is awesome and I look forward to using it! To answere your question Hunter Green is a shade of green. if you were to google image it, it will come up with the exact colour.