Discussion of "The Call" by AnimaBella
nashvillebecker 1 year, 10 months ago
Wouldn't Vlad's pre-impalees smell the carnage? I like your concept, the simplicity, and the [cliff]hanger, but to make it work, he'd have to dispose of the bodies elsewhere. If the whole apartment reeked of death, I don't care how drunk he gets the girls; it's impossible to woo when your home smells like a slaughterhouse.
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AnimaBella 1 year, 10 months ago
Thank you so much for posting this comment. I was starting to think no one was interested in my stories or they just weren't good. You've given me a lot to think about as far as the scent in the apartment giving these women a hint that Vladimir is bad news. This didn't even cross my mind while writing it.
Also, in writing Prophecy, I'm going to avoid any similarities to Twilight, seeing as I despise the entire saga and Stephanie Meyers' writing style altogether. I assure you, while writing it, I had no intentions of making Luke a vampire. So hopefully, you will read my second chapter and let me know if I made improvements. I will definitely use your suggestions. Thank you again, for the awesome constructive criticism.
By the way, I read "The Third Explosion From the Right"
You are an amazing writer. I hope that I can reach your level over time!
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