Discussion of "A Dark Wind ch.2" by AndrewLamar

You should have add ch.3 to this chapter instead of the first chapter and get the staff to delete the other. It doesn't really make sense to have both chapter 2 and 3 coming off of chapter 1.

No, you don't understand. Add chapter 2 to 1, 3 to 2, etc. Any chapter added to chapter 1 is essentially, just another but different chapter 2. Do you understand what I'm getting at? Look at other stories.

...Yea, I actually understand. I realized my mistake earlier. Thanks for explaining it to me. How could I change it?

Andrew Lamar

Um, I'd say just copy and paste your chapter 3 into a new chapter that you add onto this chapter and send an email to the staff asking for the other chapter 3 to be deleted.

Here's a comment for this particular chapter. Again with the big block paragraph. It hurts the eyes and scares away readers. It's easy to get lost in that kind of format and get confused. At least break it up for dialogue. Every time the speaker changes, you're supposed to start a new paragraph.
The content is good and interesting. This strange man with a boring wife and what seems like an anger problem, which he seems to solve by murdering. Good stuff.
Another thing, try posting larger chapters. There's just not that much content in these two beginning chapters to work with. If they together had been the first chapter, it would make more sense. Give the reader more to work with before they have to decide on continuing to the next chapter or ignoring the rest of the story.