All Comments by Althorian

your poem has an interesting theme running through it but id say that i think you focused a bit to much on trying to make it rhyme that the feel of it is lost a little but i quite like it

I'd just like to say that it is an interesting concept that you've created here but I think you need to spread your work out a little. Add some paragraph breaks. And just a suggestion from me maybe in chapter 3 or 4 she could meet up with Nick in that little cafe he plays in they would be able to chat unhindered there allowing for some diverse dialogs. Have fun and keep it up.

this was good mate oh and btw ill be adding more poems soon

Thank you very much cornelius

ty dogdeity

don't worry about it if im honest i really struggled to find a way to continue from the first chapter. i think also shown by there only being one other chapter added to it

ty very much thought you migth like it a little more.

Whats makes u so sure its a man in the well rigid? Why not a girl or even some other sort of creature not yet discussed? a changeling perhaps.
I thought it was fantstically open ended and therefore ripe for many different interpretations.
I gave it a 5.

ty for the comments ill work on it later and repost it but a hose would hold provided it was long enough it would be a viable solution to the problem caused by a girl who was in a well for an unkown period of time and therefore may only have weighed very little

ty very much for the comment i was just aiming to take a different angle to the other chapter 2's

Awesome mate wot do you think of my bit?
I like your little spin on it lol

I was just wondering if it would be possible for a few people to rate and comment my work. Critism is welcomed, as is praise and encouragement (obviously lol). If anyone could do this it would be greatly appreciated.
I also think there should be some sort of messaging or friends service that could be used (just an idea but the site is awesome so far).

Hello everyone, I'd just like to say I'm new to this site and have posted two chapters on the horror mashes. Comments and votes would be appreciated. I'd also like to say well done to all the admin, the writers and website designers keep up the good work.