your poem has an interesting theme running through it but id say that i think you focused a bit to much on trying to make it rhyme that the feel of it is lost a little but i quite like it

I'd just like to say that it is an interesting concept that you've created here but I think you need to spread your work out a little. Add some paragraph breaks. And just a suggestion from me maybe in chapter 3 or 4 she could meet up with Nick in that little cafe he plays in they would be able to chat unhindered there allowing for some diverse dialogs. Have fun and keep it up.

this was good mate oh and btw ill be adding more poems soon

Thank you very much cornelius

ty dogdeity

don't worry about it if im honest i really struggled to find a way to continue from the first chapter. i think also shown by there only being one other chapter added to it

ty very much thought you migth like it a little more.

Whats makes u so sure its a man in the well rigid? Why not a girl or even some other sort of creature not yet discussed? a changeling perhaps.
I thought it was fantstically open ended and therefore ripe for many different interpretations.
I gave it a 5.

ty for the comments ill work on it later and repost it but a hose would hold provided it was long enough it would be a viable solution to the problem caused by a girl who was in a well for an unkown period of time and therefore may only have weighed very little

ty very much for the comment i was just aiming to take a different angle to the other chapter 2's