Aggeloi
Last Login: Dec. 27, 2008
236 Comments by Aggeloi
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Aggeloi 13 minutes ago
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Also, just to throw it out there - the reason Pete became scared after Maribel shot him was because there are a lot of people out there who wave guns around, but would probably crap their pants if they ever actually fired one. He knew she was an agent, but I'm guessing would also know that her job largely was to keep low profile and snitch information to her superiors. He, on the other hand, clearly has a 'dirty hands' sort of job, which leads to a certain feeling of superiority - one reinforced by seeing her as a sweet, kind, loving teacher day in and day out. I don't think he believed she really had it in her to shoot him, and she'd given him no reason to believe that before that moment. He learned his lesson REAL fast. |
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Aggeloi 46 minutes ago
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Thanks, Wolf! I appreciate the feedback. To answer some of your questions: |
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Aggeloi 1 day, 2 hours ago
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lol - I see :) Thanks for the feedback! |
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Aggeloi 1 day, 22 hours ago
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Thanks, hebe! Glad you liked it. Any feedback on what made the beginning feel shaky? Thanks! |
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Aggeloi 2 days, 3 hours ago
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Okay, everyone, the punch was my bad. Because Shadinah hasn't had as much experience writing action sequences as I have, she asked me to be her 'action advisor' for this piece, and I was the one who suggested the 'right hook' line. My apologies, Shadinah! |
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Aggeloi 2 days, 4 hours ago
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Thanks for the feedback! Basically, I originally was not going to put an entry in for chapter 5 because I had been disappointed with the turn away from the 'supernatural' events of chapters 2 & 3. I had also felt that attempts to explain those events without some supernatural element, at least for me, would fall flat. However, after reading Nash's post in the forum about the loose ends in the story, with the supernatural elements being among the first listed, I was hit by this idea. If I recall correctly, Robert's description of the Society itself left some room for ambiguity. He talked about being into 'HARD science', but that could have just been HIS role in it, which is how I took it. It struck me as a fun idea that he had left out the Society's true nature when speaking to his oh-so-rational wife, and that they're actually some bizarre cult-like group. I understand, however, where it seemed to come out of left field for you. In honesty, this was a selfish chapter for me. I hadn't written in about a month, and it was the first inspiration to write in that entire time, and it was a thrill just to be back at the keyboard. Thanks for reading and thanks for the feedback! |
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Aggeloi 2 days, 20 hours ago
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BTW, Nash - thanks so much for posting this. It's what inspired me to write my entry - and I was thrilled after hardly writing anything at all for about a MONTH. Much appreciated! |
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Aggeloi 2 days, 20 hours ago
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Good stuff here! I definitely like the twist, with the kids developing mental abilities (which neatly explains the bizarre events in previous chapters), and your writing, as always, is smooth and easy to read. Well done! |
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Aggeloi 2 days, 20 hours ago
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Right here. Prepare for processing. |
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Aggeloi 3 days, 4 hours ago
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Thanks for the feedback! I confess, I only got the inspiration for this chapter Monday morning, and knowing that I had no time to write on Tuesday, the deadline, I sort of rushed through it. |
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13 Chapters by Aggeloi
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4.1/5.0 - published Jan 06, 2009 - 15 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.6/5.0 - published Dec 22, 2008 - 4 comments (preview)
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2.9/5.0 - published Dec 07, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.2/5.0 - published Nov 25, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.7/5.0 - published Nov 13, 2008 - 54 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.7/5.0 - published Nov 06, 2008 - 12 comments - start of story (preview)
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3.9/5.0 - published Oct 27, 2008 - 7 comments (preview)
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3.2/5.0 - published Oct 16, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story (preview)
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4.5/5.0 - published Oct 04, 2008 - 17 comments - start of story (preview)
Silent Jimmy's greatest work.
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3.8/5.0 - published Oct 03, 2008 - 2 comments (preview)
My life is over," Miss Angie moaned, draping herself dramatically across the couch. Her new taffetta gown spread out so far, it almost hid the entire couch from sight.
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4.6/5.0 - published Sep 25, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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4.5/5.0 - published Sep 25, 2008 - 6 comments - start of story
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