Uh... wow. Please ignore that last comment... I don't know where my brain was, only that I was very tired of this random stranger believing he has magic psychic powers and is, for some reason unknown to me, convinced that his irrational fantasies are 'truth'. So pardon my rather stupid and childish comment there.

Wow, you must really want my body.

Apparently you came onto the show late, because I actually did call in shortly before Shadinah did. The guys even noted that my number is a 425 area code, and hers is a 360. I actually had a rather long conversation with the guys, so I'm surprised you missed it.

Now, sweetie, I know this is going to be hard for you to hear - and I'm rather flattered by your attentions, really - but it just isn't healthy for you to be this obsessed with me. Besides, I have a husband, and I work, so I really just don't have time in my life for a stalker right now. So like I said, I am flattered, and thank you for being so concerned about me - but it just isn't going to work out between us. I've never even really been interested in having a stalker-victim relationship. But stay strong - there are plenty of people out there who would just LOVE to have thier own personal little stalker. So keep a stiff upper lip and keep looking, love. Best of luck to you in that search.

I gave it a 4, by the way :-)

4.5, by the way :-)

This was great! You use excellent imagery that doesn't slow down the story - a hard balance to make, but you do it marvelously. Her hissy fit was straight up impressive.

I am curious about the opening line of the first chapter ("I am the pretender" or something to that effect). I'd love to see that concept expanded on.

Well done and keep it up!

The opening line was a great hook. You've got some great lines, like 'a glimmering halo of diamond droplets' and 'pearls of ice and blood waltz with one another'. The pacing doesn't portray the same panic you're describing - however, I still rather enjoyed it, and sometimes that was a very good thing (like the pearls of ice and blood section). It could use a bit of editing ('I' is always capitalized), and in honesty, the one line of dialogue felt a bit stiff and unnatural.
But overall, I really enjoyed it. Keep at it!

And Writerwannabe, Wolfram, and Crystalfoo - congrats on the runners-up! (Runner-ups? Not sure on that one :-)
Like I said - great round! There were a lot of awesome entries.

Thank you, everyone! It was a great round, and a tight race - I'm REALLY looking forward to seeing where everyone takes the next chapter!

I think you got my two entries mixed up - you're referring to my entry, 'The Plan', which was not a 'finalist' in this round. But I'm glad you liked it :-) 'Be a Mormon' is one of my personal favorites, too.