Discussion of "Burn" by Acee_Andrade

I like the description and it held my interest. While I was reading, I felt as if you were going to make the main character a pedophile. Why was he burning the kleenex? I think you can do a lot with your story.

Like the story very much . Yeah whats up with the kleenex? Interesting..will check back later!

I certainly have an idea of what the Kleenex represents, but I left it open for others to mash on it if they wanted. I'll give it a few days and if no one adds, I'll continue it.

I really enjoyed the read!

Very nice, Acee. A little bit wordy, maybe, but on the good side. The mention of a "kitty frenzy" is sort of distracting from the basic tone of the story, but a great read nonetheless!

This is a very interesting story and one that most certainly should be continued. The Kleenex could be anything from the loss of purity and faith to an allusion to the KKK. For a moment there, it did seem as though the story was about to take a turn toward pedophilia, but it was more about the desire to be near innocence and naivete. Your descriptions are fantastic and immediately pull the reader into Aidan's world. I can't wait to read more.

Dawn, that means a lot thank you, AC, and Thamagnopen, I'm so glad you took the time to comment. Thank you.

Nice story. I also thought that Aidan was gonna be a pedophile, but like dawn_land says it seems to be geared towards taking time to be near some sort of innoncence, when the rest of your life is hell.
This is a story that has some wonderful possibilities for a mash. This was a great read.
Also, your up next for 30 Days.

Good work; 4 stars. The neighing barf is classic. Although it might've been weaved in with more subtlety, I like the Albee reference as well. Please continue!

Part two is up if you wanna check it out.

Interesting approach and word use. Liked your descriptions of the world around your central character, keep up the excellent work.