All Comments by Acee_Andrade

4.5 excellent! I love your stories. Don't stop writing or I'd be unhappy, quite unhappy.

This was pretty and evocative.

Beautiful and epic, Nash. 4.0 from me, I really enjoyed this and was a it pissed when it was over. I really don't want to continue this, I really want to see what's in your mind. But hell, it's a mash, ain't it? Again, Bravo.

3.5 for me, irmano. I really enjoyed this peice.

Part two is up if you wanna check it out.

I liked this story, it was a bit slow at points, but maintained my interest to the end. Great possiblities for mashing, here. Good work.

Love that movie too! Much obliged, Black.

I guess I'm 14th now? Well, I'll be posting it tonight, 7.18.

This was grounded and I liked it. It was reality, or rather Tony's semblance of it. Very enjoyable.

So troubling. Again, poor man.

What happened to superhero Tony? This poor guy doesn't know if he's coming or going. Brain tumors must really suck, huh?

This was exceptional, I'm happier having read it. Bravo.

Dawn, that means a lot thank you, AC, and Thamagnopen, I'm so glad you took the time to comment. Thank you.

Thank you all for reading. I did take some liberties, and as such perhaps wasn't as mash friendly as I perhaps should have been. But I did have a lot of fun writing it, if that makes up for shortcomings in the narrative...

I certainly have an idea of what the Kleenex represents, but I left it open for others to mash on it if they wanted. I'll give it a few days and if no one adds, I'll continue it.

Number 13, you got it.

Thnaks honey, that means a lot.

Go Carl!

You know, You wrote an amazingly rich opener. There are so many directions and so many interesting facets to investigate. Usually in the case of a serial, the news spreads quick, I could have addressed it the jursidiction issue, but I must confess I was having too much fun. It's a real pleasure and honor just to be able to write and have it read. Thank you.

Nice shift of focus. I enjoyed this very much.

Giving Dr. Davis an accomplice was an interesting touch. Though, I wasn't really drawn in.

Nice! 5 from me Dog, I really love your additions. bravo!

Anthony takes more turns than a crazy straw, you gotta love it. Dogdeity, I liked this story for many reasons, but the suspense and pacing by far won the day. 5

Excellent progression and character development. Everyone felt three dimensional, especially the family as a whole, very real.

All the comments are appreciated, welcomed, and necessary. Thank you all for reading.

I really enjoyed this vision of Dante. Cyanide, huh? It was good.

I was writing it at work, sorry about the errors. I had to keep changing screens...

It's funny, but I was hoping he wouldn't be a christian. As Americans crucifixes and apple pie are familiar. I was hoping his sickness would make him question more, and perhaps put him on a road less traveled or at leat written about.

I'm not sure what I got into here. It sounds like the jokes of British Theatre professor. It made me laugh.

Don't we all wish we could be more like Carmen? Shrugging of the nonessentials? I loved it.

Nashville, you sure can turn a phrase. The writing is great, but the story didn't hook me. Still, objectively, it is really great work.

I liked your Dino's. I found the story entertaining and it moved at a good clip. My only beef is in the way you ended. Meaning, I wanted to turn the page but then next one hasn't been written yet. Bravo!

I like this story. The notebook is the unsung hero of literature. Everyone[thing] deserves its' fifteen minutes.

This was cool, real cool! I'm laughing and I'm interested. Real cool.

Mrs. Raines was a little flat, though the story moved well. She was my draw into it, in the first chapter. I wanted more of her old lady ways to poke through. Though, I'm sure if it were longer we would've got there. Good work.

I love the elderly as protagonists or antogonists. You really worked the hell out of her. Bravo!

There's so much to take in. I have to say it read like thriller and was an amazing read. I was dissapointed when it ened. Great Work!

ya'll are too kind, I appreciate it.

I liked the last comment almost as much as this addition. It was a terriffic addition!

The tension was great!

I'm curious to see where this goes. Great set-up.

Creepy old men. nice.

I like how you expanded the protagonists world. Having a mass round up was fantastic. Bravo!

nice!

The many shades of Tony, very interesting! Bravo!

I like Clarkie!

Rough on the old manliness, but Big boys get misty too. Bravo!

Your Devil was actually very frightening, you gave us just enough for minds to take off of. I really enjoyed this. I do agree with the comments that a little tranche de vie would have been nice, but I wouldn't change this chapter at all. Perhaps only add to it.

There is a certain seduction about control, isin't there?

Hey, anytime. I'm grateful that you even read it!

That's word, Thanks!!

The idea, or fear, of big brother is something we all feel. MG wrote a story anyone could follow. I appreciate the comment Writer.

I'm a bit lost. But I think I like the overall premise. Not sure.

I appreciate that. Thanks. You're right about the urgency. It was a little flat.

This was a great break from all the tension in Tony's life. A moment to realx, though, he still was faced with his impending doom. Yet he seemed upbeat, postive, almost. Nice.

You tied the other chapters into your narrative very nicely, a few errors aside. You connected with his family in a really great way, and I love that. Excellent work.

I don't mind you breaking up your chapter at all especially if the secon part will be as good as the first. Bravo.

Ouch! Brain tumors suck. But this helped me understand the mental instability of a man suffering from the inside out. Cringe-worthy, check. A good read, check.

You proactively fixed my biggest concern about this story. You countered the last chapter well. You gave life to his family, and you typos did little to hamper your storytelling.

Almost too quick of a change for me. I understand the reasoning and agree, but a bridge of some sort would have helped move the story along smoother. Other than that I find this engaging an a worthy follow up. Bye the Bye, the commments here are by far the most helpful. The disucssion and comments sound great and are thoughtful, I'm proud to member of this community.

Brilliant start! Bravo. It's the amount of possibilities that really excites me. Your research shows through the peice. I beleive every good writer is a good researcher, and you are that. Can't wait to boogie on this one.

Gimme a number and I'll get to writing. Thanks for the opportunity.

Will do. Happy to oblige.

that's word, hunts. I appreciate that.

I really appreciate you comments. It means a lot. And no, I'm not tired of you. ha.

This chapter leaves a lot of space to maneuver for anyone thinking of following it up. I think that's really important for a site like this one. Oh, and the writing is tight and clear. Write more!

Much obliged. I appreciate that.

You're absolutely right for the most part, but it's more than drugs driving him at this point. I appreciate the tip, perhaps some practical research into the 'subject' may change my mind. ha.

Chips in people: good times.

I saw the verichip as some new product. I was with you.

Swamp, thank you for pointing this story in a direction. I think I'll follow this pathway.

You certainly have a defined voice. Now simply edit yourself, its the death-work, but its necessary. However just to jump back into the realm of ideas, I loved it. keep writing.

I appreciate the comment. You're right about the continuation. Well, you live and you learn, right?
You're also correct on the propulsion of the story, there wasn't much here. To much pretense and not enough movement.

By far the most riveting part of this story. Bravo.

This is getting real exciting, keep holding it down, black.

Much obliged. I found your start to be filled with wonderful possibilities.

This is a very compelling direction to take this story. Recognizing the ego and the not journal was a fantastic choice.

I found the introduction of twins very interesting, however, I was hoping for more with that revelation. With that said, I thoroughly enjoyed this addition.

Poor Mariah. Dark, but there's alot to chew on besides despair.

i really enjoyed this. the debates of a sick mind.

I think this is a great idea, and the limits your suggesting will work wonderfully. I'm all for it.

I think a poem is a great way to start a storty, even if it might not be a story... Anyway, I really enjoyed your word choices. Very evocative.

This captured the feeling and scenery of many a break-up. It's a great beginning. I'm excited to see how others continued it.

I'm really enjoying the direction this story is taking. I'm excited to see where and how the preacher is reintroduced. This chapter (Mary ch.2) is excellent.

I find the discussion of insanity in this person's brain fascinating. Does one ever know they are insane? Can we feel ourselves slipping into madness? If so, can we stop it or is it unavoidable?